Memoirs of an unearthly love-affair

My fantasy short story "Lost in the Seven Worlds" is currently being prepared for publication with Crushing Hearts and Black Butterfly Publishing, and I am beating my brains out about finding the perfect tagline for the Ebook. The tagline is a short sentence that should sum up the main idea of the book and I have turned upside down all the possible word associations that might stir some emotion in the alleged reader. After a sleepless night I have come up with three such examples and I am very undecided about which could be the right one. The perfect tagline should grab the reader by the...coat and convince him to buy the book. I should count on you, my dearest friends, to point me to the right direction (if there is such one) and indicate which of the three taglines might seem more...inviting.
The first one is "Memoirs of an unearthly love-affair" - it's short and concise but I am afraid the reader would say.."Give me a break with your freaking memoirs"
The second one is longer, too long actually: "I was a woman away from Earth and he was an immortal in his forth life". And the third one is: "Love me to death and then raise me again". I know they don't really make sense, if you don't know much about the story, but I wish to have an idea about their impact, if any :). Thank you and kisses.

23 comments:

Jane and Lance Hattatt said...

Hello Petronela:
This is such a difficult decision to make. Headline writers of newspapers are always paid enormous sums to come up with reader grabbing phrases and one can well see why as they really do work. We really cannot offer any advice here but wish you well with coming to a final conclusion.

Amandaines said...

I personally like 'Love me to death and then rise me again'. Although shouldn't it read 'raise' instead of 'rise'?

unikorna said...

:)) yes you are right, thank you kindly..

The Furries of Whisppy said...

I prefer your first one. I like that it's short and concise. :)
Maybe I watch too many Crime shows but the 3rd one reminds me of some sadist who "loves" his victim to *death* then revives her to continue the torture. I don't think your story is along that line? ;)
Go with your gut feeling. It's usually the right one.

Launna said...

I like the 'Memoirs of an unearthly love-affair'.... I look forward to seeing which one you will choose:)

Annalisa Crawford said...

The third one intrigues me the most.

L.G. Smith said...

I have to say the third one has the most punch. I think it needs a little more detail maybe? And, yes, I know how hard it is to want to cram everything into one line. Or else leave too much out and end up with something vague. Just keep brainstorming and writing things down, and pretty soon you'll hit on the right imagery and action all in one line. :)

C.J. Sullivan said...

I like the memoirs one, and I had a dream I met you last night! :)

Teresa Ashby said...

I like "Love me to death and then raise me again" very much, but I also like the memoirs one :-) x

nutschell said...

taglines are tough! It's hard trying to summarize a whole story into one sentence. Good luck! I'm sure you'll find the perfect one.
Nutschell
www.thewritingnut.com

Judith said...

I have to say "Love me to death and then raise me again" really caught my attention. The long one was my least favorite. And congratulations again.

klahanie said...

Greetings Petronela,

Personally, I think the first one potentially encapsulates what you are trying to get across. Yes, you need a tagline that intrigues and makes the reader want to purchase the book.

Hugs and happy writing,

Gary

Botanist said...

I'm not the best person to advise here, but I liked the first one the best.

Linda R said...

I am probably the last one to give advise on a subject like this. But I have to say I like the "Love me to death and then raise me again".

Wishing the best for you my friend.

Hugs~

The Furries of Whisppy said...

No no no. Miss Tutu will continue to live on with us. You'll still see lots of her!

Maybe I was a little unclear in explaining the adoption thing because a few others thought she was leaving us too. :)

Shaharoh said...

Hi Unikorna - I like the third one because there's hint of humor in it. But it really is your choice in the end and I'm sure any of the three will work. xoxo Beauty!

Catherine said...

You are such a creative person. I am sure which ever you choose it will be the perfect one!

Wishing you a wonderful week!
xo Catherine

Petula Wright said...

I love the excitement of participating in your decision. I'd like to give you a little more to think about. I dislike the word "memoirs," it won't appeal to those who are a little adverse to memoir-like, autobiography feeling type works. I really like the word "unearthly." I'm intrigued by "woman from Earth" and "immortal in his forth life." Or worded like this: "his forth immortal life."

And, yes, the last one is good too. Although I think someone mentioned it doesn't quite say enough.

You'll make the right choice. You'll feel it when you decide. I love this kinda stuff. Reminds me when I worked in magazine and we (the editorial team) worked together to come up with cutlines for articles and taglines for photos. Ahhh the good ole days. I love the collaborative creative process.

An unearthly love affair (haunts*) a woman and an immortal.

*between? joins? connects? ...

LOL... That's all of my three cents and then some! Sorry, I got excited. :-)

Kelly said...

The perfect taglin should grab the reader by the ... coat? LOL. I thought you were going to say something else. :P

For me, Petronela, your first idea, Memoirs of an unearthly love-affair, is the one that sounds best and is the most attention grabbing, for certain.

The others are too long and speaking as a reader of all types of genres, I have to say the shorter the tagline, the better. Besides, you want to leave a bit of mystery in your tagline and not give away too much in it or else people might not bother wanting to read it.

Take care and good luck with whatever you decide.

Dixie said...

"Love me, raise me ~ to an unearthly love affair."

Okay, just having fun! Congratulations, Petronela :)

Shannon Lawrence said...

I like the first and third the best. If forced to choose between them, I'd go with the third. Intriguing, either way. Good luck!

Shannon at The Warrior Muse

YONKS said...

I like the third best. It intrigues me!
Good luck Petronella.
You're a STAR!
Di
XXXX

Latedra Gladney said...

The last two are very intriguing. The second one makes me want to know more about the world you've created. the third one makes me want to find out about this love story between your characters; it sounds full of action, tough decisions and forbidden romance. I just this the first one doesn't give you enough but you did name your post after it so maybe you've already got your answer.

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